Quite an interesting one here, with some comments on the story. Since another rejection is just as likely to make completely contrary points, I probably won’t change the tale as yet – it’s not been through the rounds yet!

Dear Edoardo Albert,

Thank you for letting us read The First King Of All The Earth. Unfortunately, it does not meet our needs at this time.

As far as fables go, this isn’t a bad one. I thought it might turn into a speculative Tower of Babel story, but I’m glad it didn’t. The writing itself was sparse but straightforward, the story came to a predictable but solid climax.

I’m not sure if there’s enough depth here, though. I enjoyed it, and it tried for some greater meaning with the comments about the king’s descendants, but in the end, everyone in the story got what they wanted, with little struggle. They instituted slavery, the king kept knowledge from the star…but nothing came of it.